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I love twists and telling creepy little stories. Perhaps, for a poet, that isn't such a bad thing? [link]
Questions for Critique:
1. Does the time relationship make sense? If not, how could I change it while still maintaining the feel of the poem?
2. What do you get from this poem?
3. Anything else you feel like adding?